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Do you think festivals are important for counties?

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I think festivals are important for countries.
The reason is that festivals help that tourism rate is up.
That also can increase incomes throgh festivals. Festivals are very helpful to the local economy. So many local government try to inform for their festivals.
Special festivals help promote to other countries.

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Hi, Miss Yeonsu!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


I think festivals are important for countries.
>> CORRECT!
The reason is that festivals help that tourism rate is up.
>>  The reason is that festivals help the tourism rate to go up.
That also can increase incomes throgh festivals. 
>> That also can increase the incomes through festivals. 
Festivals are very helpful to the local economy. 
>> CORRECT!
So many local government try to inform for their festivals.
>> So many local governments try to inform people about the festivals.
Special festivals help promote to other countries.
>> Special festivals help to promote tourism for other countries.

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