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What traditional practices in your family do you want to cut off?

작성자: 황*은
2024-02-06 3603

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Many Korean people want to cut off the '차례', which is making good food for their ancestors who have passed away because it's hard to make lots of food and it costs a lot although we don't really believe in ancestor ghosts nowadays. But our family are not that stressful about '차례'. In our maternal family, it has been already cut off when my grandfather passed away and my faternal family understands our parents not participating in '차례' because they know we are Christians.
If I have to pick one up, I want to cut off the tradition to visit father's family first. Because of that, my parents, my brother and I hardly meet my father's sister's family. It's so weird.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good day again, Seong Eun!
I heard that a lot of young people whether they are not Christians, would like to stop doing the ancestral rites because they are busy. one of my students who is a mom told me that she will be the last person doing this because when she gets old she will not ask her two sons to do ancestral rite for her. Remembering her by visiting her tomb is enough.
Thank you for this!
T. Aki~

Many Korean people want to cut off the '차례', which is making good food for their ancestors who have passed away because it's hard to make lots of food and it costs a lot although we don't really believe in ancestor ghosts nowadays.
>>> Many Korean people want to cut off the 'Ancestral rites, which is making good food for their ancestors who have passed away because it's hard to make lots of food and it costs a lot although we don't believe in ancestor ghosts nowadays.

But our family are not that stressful about '차례'.
>>> But our family is not that stressed about the ancestral rites or Memorial Day ceremony.

In our maternal family, it has been already cut off when my grandfather passed away and my faternal family understands our parents not participating in '차례' because they know we are Christians.
>>> In our maternal family, it has been already cut off when my grandfather passed away and my paternal family understands our parents not participating in '차례' because they know we are Christians.

If I have to pick one up, I want to cut off the tradition to visit father's family first.
>>>  If I have to pick one up, I want to cut off the tradition of visiting my father's family first.

Because of that, my parents, my brother and I hardly meet my father's sister's family. It's so weird.
>>> Because of that, my parents, my brother, and I hardly meet my father's sister's family. It's so weird.

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