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Discuss a memorable experience you had while traveling.

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During my honeymoon trip, I went to some tourist spots.
Devil's eyes is the best among them, Devil's eyes is located in Bali, Indonesia.
Devil's eyes is the cliff by the sea.
We can see the cliff eat the wave and spout wave.
I still have Devil's eyes video for my smart phone.

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Hi JT! That place sounds amazing. I think it was an amazing experience and I'm glad you were able to spend it with your wife. Thank you for sharing your experience. 
~~ Teacher Ryka^^


During my honeymoon trip, I went to some tourist spots.
>> During my honeymoon trip, we went to some tourist spots.

Devil's eyes is the best among them.
>> Devil's Tears was the best among them.

Devil's eyes is located in Bali, Indonesia.
>> It is located in Bali, Indonesia.

Devil's eyes is the cliff by the sea.
>> It's a cliff by the sea.

We can see the cliff eat the wave and spout wave.
>> We can see the waves splash out from the cliff's edge.

I still have Devil's eyes video for my smart phone.
>> I still have a video of the Devil's Tears on my phone.
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