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Have you ever experienced sadness for a long period of time?

When I got a heartbreak for the first time in high school, it was such a tough time for me.
It took around 4 months that I totally moved on. After breaking up with each others, I still used to love her for 4 months and it makes me feel really sad. I learned a lot of things from that time. How to manage sadness and move on from ex-girlfriend. I used to listen to music that cheers me up, spend time alone for relaxing during that time. Now I'm quite confident not to afraid of making love. I'm thankful for her.

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Hello Geon!
Having a "heart" ache experience is common to most people. It happens to anyone who is involved in a relationship. People say that you shouldn't expect a lot from "Young love", there is only a small percentage of relationships who started falling in love at a young age with the same person and ended marrying each other. Believe me, among my friends, there are only two people (or couples) that I know, who were like that, and the rest? we all fall out of love and get broken-hearted, What matters is how you faced that challenge courageously, 
Thank you for sharing this! Have a good day!


When I got a heartbreak for the first time in high school, it was such a tough time for me.
>> When I got heartbreak for the first time in high school, it was such a tough time for me.

It took around 4 months that I totally moved on.
>> It took around 4 months before I moved on.


After breaking up with each others, I still used to love her for 4 months and it makes me feel really sad.
>>  After breaking up with each other, I still used to love her for 4 months and it makes me feel sad.

I learned a lot of things from that time. How to manage sadness and move on from ex-girlfriend.
>> I learned a lot of things from that time. How to manage sadness and move on from ex-girlfriend.

I used to listen to music that cheers me up, spend time alone for relaxing during that time.
>>  I used to listen to music that cheers me up and spend time alone to relax during that time.

Now I'm quite confident not to afraid of making love. I'm thankful for her.
>>  Now I'm quite confident not to be afraid of falling in love. I'm thankful for her.

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