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I\'d like to live on my own when I\'m about 25.

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In Korea, university is usually considered a mandatory course, so I often live with my family until I get out of university.
Therefore, I think I usually start living alone in time for my first job when I am 25 years old.
There are cases where other parents live together even when they get older, but most of them live together when they can't afford it, or when they give financial support to their parents.
I'm not sure which case is better but in my case I'd like to live on my own when I'm about 25.

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Hi Da Hye, 

It's great to hear about your plans for the future. Living independently can bring a sense of freedom and responsibility. Many young adults in Korea choose to live with their families until completing university and then venture out on their own as they start their careers. Wanting to live independently around the age of 25 seems like a thoughtful decision, allowing you to establish your own space and routines. Whatever path you choose, I'm sure you'll make the best decision for yourself.  

~Teacher Cathy 

 

In Korea, university is usually considered a mandatory course, so I often live with my family until I get out of university. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>In Korea, attending university is typically seen as mandatory, so many people often live with their families until they graduate from university. 

 

Therefore, I think I usually start living alone in time for my first job when I am 25 years old. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Hence, I believe I will typically begin living independently around the time I start my first job at the age of 25. 

 

There are cases where other parents live together even when they get older, but most of them live together when they can't afford it, or when they give financial support to their parents. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Some parents continue living together even as they grow older, but this often happens when they can't afford to live separately or when they provide financial support to their parents. 

 

I'm not sure which case is better but in my case I'd like to live on my own when I'm about 25. 

>>I'm not sure which case is better but in my case, I'd like to live on my own when I'm about 25. 

 

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