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The impact of technology

작성자: 임*진
2024-02-29 2927

회원님의 영작문

I think that technology like video calls has made it difficult to check the body language than before.
After Covid-19, job interviews have been held by online as I did 2 times of online interviews in present company.
I'm good at meeting eyes from one interviewer to another and using two hands when I explain something.
However, it could not be appealed because I just showed only my head and shoulders and it was not easy to check each interviewer's face.
On the other side, since my face is zoomed in online call, interviewers can easily catch the changes of facial expressions which help them to understand about me.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello there, Ms. Yu Jin! I completely agree with you. The shift to video calls has indeed posed challenges in accurately gauging body language, which used to be more accessible in face-to-face interactions. Thank you for spring time to write about this topic.
~T. Jenna

I think that technology like video calls has made it difficult to check the body language than before.
>> I think that technology, like video calls, has made it more difficult to check body language than before.
OR
>>I believe that advancements in technology, such as video calls, have heightened the challenge of interpreting body language compared to earlier times.
After Covid-19, job interviews have been held by online as I did 2 times of online interviews in present company.
>>After Covid-19, job interviews have been held/conducted online, as I have experienced two online interviews in my present/current company.
I'm good at meeting eyes from one interviewer to another and using two hands when I explain something.
Correct, or
>>I excel at maintaining eye contact with each interviewer and using both hands to explain concepts during interviews.
However, it could not be appealed because I just showed only my head and shoulders and it was not easy to check each interviewer's face.
>>However, these were not visible since I only showed my head and shoulders, making it difficult to assess each interviewer's face.
OR
>>However, as I only showed my head and shoulders, these details were not visible, making it challenging to evaluate each interviewer's facial expressions.
On the other side, since my face is zoomed in online call, interviewers can easily catch the changes of facial expressions which help them to understand about me.
>>On the other hand, since my face is zoomed in during online calls, interviewers can easily catch/observe the changes in my facial expressions, which help them understand about me.
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