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my first storm story :)

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2024-03-15 3662

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I experienced a storm.
At that time, a storm came in 2015, so I didn't go to school, and I taped it to the window with an 'x' mark.
Because a window with 'x' tape on it is stronger than a window without it.
I didn't go to school because of the storm that day
The next day, I remembered that the branches were scattered in front of the house.

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Hi Yun Da Hye, 

Your recount of your first storm experience is vivid and captivating. It's fascinating how you took precautions by taping an 'x' on the window to reinforce it against the storm. Your attention to detail and resourcefulness shine through in your narrative. Thank you for sharing your story! ^^

~Teacher Cathy 

 

I experienced a storm. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I went through a storm. 

At that time, a storm came in 2015, so I didn't go to school, and I taped it to the window with an 'x' mark. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>During that period in 2015, a storm occurred, preventing me from attending school. I marked it on the window with an 'x'. 

Because a window with 'x' tape on it is stronger than a window without it. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Having 'x' tape on a window makes it stronger compared to a window without it. 

I didn't go to school because of the storm that day 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I missed school due to the storm that day. 

The next day, I remembered that the branches were scattered in front of the house. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>The following day, I recalled seeing branches scattered in front of the house. 

 

 

 

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