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What is your favorite hobby, and why do you enjoy it? Describe how it makes you feel and how you spe

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I enjoy doing some crafts. I make tiny rooms with boxes, clay, color pencils, paint and so on. While doing it, I think of ideas about how to express the tiny furniture, floors and walls with the material and I love that process. Also, I love the crafting itself. It helps me concentrate to one thing and makes me calm. But I can do this hobby when I have left energy after a day. When I'm so tired, I just do my phone in my bed.

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Hi Seong Eun, 

I really enjoyed learning about your favorite activity - crafting! It seems to me that you put a lot of effort and creativity into making such small rooms, using boxes, clay, colored pencils, and paint. I am very impressed with how you express your ideas through furniture, floors, and walls. I am glad to learn that you enjoy this activity, and it helps to relax and calm down. I believe it is essential to have something that helps you concentrate on your thoughts and take the load off your shoulders after a long day. Please do not forget about self-care and do the crafts when you do not feel exhausted. And if you feel too tired - relax and have some good rest. Goodnight. ^^ 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

I enjoy doing some crafts 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I enjoy doing crafts. 

I make tiny rooms with boxes, clay, color pencils, paint and so on.  

>>I make tiny rooms with boxes, clay, colored pencils, paint, and so on.  

While doing it, I think of ideas about how to express the tiny furniture, floors and walls with the material and I love that process.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>While doing it, I think of ideas about what to do with the tiny furniture, floors, and walls with my material and I like that process. 

Also, I love the crafting itself.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I also love the craft itself. 

It helps me concentrate to one thing and makes me calm.  

>>It helps me concentrate on one thing and makes me calm.  

But I can do this hobby when I have left energy after a day.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>But I can only do this hobby if I have energy left after my day. 

When I'm so tired, I just do my phone in my bed. 

>>When I'm so tired, I just use my phone in my bed. 

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