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회원님의 영작문

Interest in the gaming industry has constantly enabled me to monitor the market. Primarily, I strive not to miss any information about new game releases. Even if I can't play all of them directly, I seek to gain an overall evaluation and understanding of games through reviews, ratings on platforms like Steam, or watching streamers play.
Furthermore, I aim to grasp the trends and industry orientations within the gaming market. This interest has led me to research market trends through platforms like Mobile Index and Sensor Tower. I have observed the trend where RPGs traditionally dominated the domestic gaming market, but game companies are not complacent and are choosing to expand their business direction in terms of genres and platforms.
Finally, I am also paying attention to changes or regulations on the platform situation affecting the game industry, such as lawsuits by two major markets and Epic Games on in-app payments and regulations on probability-based items.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Eugene!
Your response in the job interview demonstrates a strong understanding of the gaming industry's market trends and regulatory landscape. You effectively highlighted your methods for staying informed and staying aware of regulatory changes impacting the industry. Consider balancing detail with conciseness to ensure clarity while expressing how your insights can benefit potential employers, such as informing marketing strategies or business expansion plans. Overall, your depth of knowledge and proactive approach to industry dynamics is commendable!
~ Teacher Maxine

Interest in the gaming industry has constantly enabled me to monitor the market.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> My ongoing interest in the gaming industry has allowed me to continuously monitor the market.

Primarily, I strive not to miss any information about new game releases.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> My main focus is to ensure that I don't overlook any details regarding new game releases.

Even if I can't play all of them directly, I seek to gain an overall evaluation and understanding of games through reviews, ratings on platforms like Steam, or watching streamers play.
>> CORRECT!

Furthermore, I aim to grasp the trends and industry orientations within the gaming market.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Additionally, I strive to understand the trends and industry dynamics within the gaming market.

This interest has led me to research market trends through platforms like Mobile Index and Sensor Tower.
>> CORRECT!

I have observed the trend where RPGs traditionally dominated the domestic gaming market, but game companies are not complacent and are choosing to expand their business direction in terms of genres and platforms.
>> CORRECT!

Finally, I am also paying attention to changes or regulations on the platform situation affecting the game industry, such as lawsuits by two major markets and Epic Games on in-app payments and regulations on probability-based items.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Lastly, I am closely monitoring changes and regulations in the platform landscape that impact the gaming industry, including lawsuits involving major markets and Epic Games regarding in-app payments and regulations on probability-based items.

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