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My Homework

작성자: 김*제
2024-03-21 2454

회원님의 영작문

My opinion:Books are better

Televisions:
Advantages:
You can watch funny TV shows and cartoons
It can give you new informations quickly
As for books, you have to buy them each time, but not for televisions
Disadvantages:
Your eyes can hurt
Maybe there would be violent channels
If you watch it too much, you will maybe have difficulty to read, or to write.

Books:
Advantages:
It will be healthier than TV
Your eyes woudn't hurt
Your writing skills can improve
You can get more informations than TV
Disadvanges:
You have to buy them each time

Opinion:
In my opinion, I think books are better.
Books are good for concentrating ourselves and as you read books, you can get many information than the TV.
Also, when you read the book, you can improve your writing skills.For example,you can learn how to divide paragraphs,you can learn which signs you put for talking,thinking or when you start explaining.In addition,if you watch TV too much time, your eyes can have a serious problem.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Great job, Minje!
Books offer numerous advantages such as enhancing concentration, providing in-depth information, and improving writing skills. Reading books allows us to delve into various topics, understand complex ideas, and develop critical thinking skills. Moreover, unlike TV, excessive screen time can lead to eye strain and other health issues. Overall, books offer a more enriching and beneficial experience compared to television. 
Just a reminder: When writing your sentences for the advantages and disadvantages of each side, don't forget about the proper punctuation mark at the end. In addition, when you proceed to the next sentence, put a space after the period. Lastly, be careful with spelling. :)
Anyhow, you really did well on this homework. I appreciate all the details. Below this message, I listed some sentences and words that needed improvement. Please review my recommendations. 
~ Teacher Maxine 

It can give you new informations quickly.
>> It can give you new information quickly.

Your eyes woudn't hurt.
>> Your eyes wouldn't hurt.

Disadvanges
>> Disadvantages 

In my opinion, I think books are better.
>> In my opinion, books are better.

Books are good for concentrating ourselves and as you read books, you can get many information than the TV.
>> Books are beneficial for improving concentration. Additionally, reading books provides more information compared to watching TV.

Also, when you read the book, you can improve your writing skills.For example,you can learn how to divide paragraphs,you can learn which signs you put for talking,thinking or when you start explaining.
>> Reading books can improve your writing skills. For example, you can learn how to divide paragraphs and when to use punctuation for dialogue, thoughts, or explanations.

In addition,if you watch TV too much time, your eyes can have a serious problem.
>> Moreover, spending too much time watching TV can lead to serious eye problems.

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