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Toothpaste technology

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In Korea, there are many innovative and ingenious toothpastes. Recently I saw an advertisement about a novel toothpaste by a research team at Seoul National University. It reads that if you use it continuously for two weeks, your yellowish teeth will turn back into white ones. But when I checked the reviews, I realized that it took some time to have that effect and the effect was not as big as expected. However advanced the toothpaste technology is, I think going to see dentist is still unavoidable.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
Thank you for taking the time to do your homework. I agree with you! I've also seen a lot of advertisements for toothpaste, and sometimes even toothbrushes, claiming to be more advanced due to technology. But in reality, the effect is gradual, and it takes continuous use to see its effects.
- T. Caitlyn
In Korea, there are many innovative and ingenious toothpastes. 
>> CORRECT
Recently I saw an advertisement about a novel toothpaste by a research team at Seoul National University. 
>> CORRECT
It reads that if you use it continuously for two weeks, your yellowish teeth will turn back into white ones. 
>> It claims that if you use it continuously for two weeks, your yellowish teeth will turn back to white.
But when I checked the reviews, I realized that it took some time to have that effect and the effect was not as big as expected. 
>> CORRECT
However advanced the toothpaste technology is, I think going to see dentist is still unavoidable.
>> However advanced the toothpaste technology is, I think going to see a dentist is still unavoidable.
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