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I don't think there is a perfect family. Does a family need to be perfect? If you pursue perfection, you will see big shortcomings and only complaints will build. These days, there are various types of families and people suffer from them. A family that spends nothing special, but a family that spends a special time together every day is precious.

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Hi Mia!  I agree with you that striving for perfection may lead to big shortcomings. I think it is better to embrace imperfections and embrace the flaws of our family members. 
-Khai

I don't think there is a perfect family. 

>> CORRECT

OR 

>> There may not be a perfect family.

Does a family need to be perfect? 

>> CORRECT

If you pursue perfection, you will see big shortcomings and only complaints will build. 

>> CORRECT

OR

>> You will see big shortcomings if you pursue perfection. Also, complaints might arise.

These days, there are various types of families and people suffer from them. 

>> CORRECT

OR

>> These days, there are various types of families, and people suffer from flaws.

A family that spends nothing special, but a family that spends a special time together every day is precious.

>> A family that spends nothing special, but a family that spends special time together every day, is precious.


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