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Free school lunch program helps students feel equal. Some students can't afford good lunch whereas some can, which arrouse feeling of unfair to them. And it's definitely not a good experience, which can affect whole life. They may end up pursuing money too much or feeling frustrated for not enough money. Students feel more fair in their childhood thanks to free school lunch program.
Also it provides balanced diet so it's good for their health. If we let students eat what they want, they will look for sweet, fatty, salty and spicy food(unhealthy food). Free school lunch program can prevent that.

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Hi Seong Eun, 

Your explanation of the importance of the free school lunch program in South Korea is insightful. It does help create a sense of equity among students, ensuring that everyone has access to nutritious foods regardless of their income. Also, by providing a balanced diet, the program promotes positive health outcomes among students, moving them away from unhealthy food choices. Continue the thoughtful research! 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

Free school lunch program helps students feel equal.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Free school lunch program will help the students feel equal. 

Some students can't afford good lunch whereas some can, which arrouse feeling of unfair to them.  

>>Some students can't afford a good lunch whereas some can, which may make them feel that things are unfair. 

And it's definitely not a good experience, which can affect whole life.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>And it's definitely not a good experience, which can affect their whole life. 

They may end up pursuing money too much or feeling frustrated for not enough money.  

>>They may end up pursuing money too much or feeling frustrated for not having enough money. 

Students feel more fair in their childhood thanks to free school lunch program. 

>>Students feel more fair in their childhood thanks to the free school lunch program. 

Also it provides balanced diet so it's good for their health.  

>>Also it provides a balanced diet so it's good for their health.  

If we let students eat what they want, they will look for sweet, fatty, salty and spicy food(unhealthy food).  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>If we let students eat what they want, they will look for sweet, fatty, salty, and spicy food which are all unhealthy. 

Free school lunch program can prevent that. 

>>A free school lunch program can prevent that. 

 

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