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Q: What benefits do you get when you work hard to get good grades?
A: I think I can go to academies or get whatever I want for the studies.
But I actually think money won't be the main reason for good grades because those who get good grades just stud hard but don't earn.
But, if they're really out of money, then they should earn by themselves.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework!

~T. Divina^^

Please take note of the following:

1. I think I can go to academies or get whatever I want for the studies.
>>CORRECT!

2. But I actually think money won't be the main reason for good grades because those who get good grades just stud hard but don't earn.
>>I actually think that money won't be the main reason for getting good grades because those who get good grades just studied hard without earning.

3. But, if they're really out of money, then they should earn by themselves.
>>CORRECT!

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