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Hello, T. Sharon! This is my homework.

I wish that rain doesn't come around my house. While it's raining, hands are busy to grip something.
After it rains, ground is so mud that I sometimes feel angry. So I don't like rain comes.

Good night!

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Hi Irene!
Starting the week right is very important.
Today, you have already done one good thing for yourself.
You wrote this composition and this serves as good practice.
I'm sure the rest of the week would go smoothly as well.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I wish that rain doesn't come around my house. 
>> Correct
While it's raining, hands are busy to grip something.
>> While it's raining, my hands would be busy gripping something.
After it rains, ground is so mud that I sometimes feel angry. 
>> After it rains, the ground is so muddy that I sometimes feel angry. 
So I don't like rain comes.
>> So I don't like it when the rain comes.
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