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Q: How do wealthy people differ from those who are not?
A: I think the difference is the mindset.
Usually when people are born rich, they might get lazy or they need to be perfect because their parents would want them to.
On the other hand, those who are not rich, they need to work hard even if they don't want t0.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes:

1. I think the difference is the mindset.
>>CORRECT!

2. Usually when people are born rich, they might get lazy or they need to be perfect because their parents would want them to.
>>Usually when people are born rich, they tend to get lazy, or they need to be perfect because their parents would want them to.

3. On the other hand, those who are not rich, they need to work hard even if they don't want t0.
>>On the other hand, those who are not born rich need to work hard even if they don't want to.

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