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Should we ban plastic bags?
My opinion:No
Reason:It is true that plastic bags are being harmful towards the enviroment. There is a solution for this, which is to recycle them but many people are not doing that. But in the other hand, many people do agree that plastic bags are convinient and useful. So maybe it is not a good idea to ban them.In my opinion, I think it will be a good idea to make a law saying thatpeople will have to recycle their plastic bags not everytime, but often. And a lot of taxes for the ones who throw them away where they want. So because of the law, people will start recycling all the plastic bags. Then, after years, people will get use to it so the animals won't die, and there will be less trash.

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Hello, Minje!
Your response is well-structured and provides a balanced view on the topic of banning plastic bags. You acknowledge the harmful effects of plastic bags on the environment and propose a practical solution. This approach shows thoughtful consideration of both environmental concerns and practical solutions. Good job on this! However, be careful of some minor grammatical errors and typos. Overall, your response demonstrates critical thinking. Keep it up!
~ Teacher Maxine

It is true that plastic bags are being harmful towards the enviroment. 
>> It is true that plastic bags are harmful towards the environment.

There is a solution for this, which is to recycle them but many people are not doing that. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> A solution exists, which involves recycling them, but many people are not following through with it.

But in the other hand, many people do agree that plastic bags are convinient and useful. So maybe it is not a good idea to ban them.
>> On the other hand, many people do agree that plastic bags are convenient and useful, so maybe it is not a good idea to ban them.

In my opinion, I think it will be a good idea to make a law saying thatpeople will have to recycle their plastic bags not everytime, but often. 
>> In my opinion, I think it will be a good idea to make a law saying that people will have to recycle their plastic bags not every time, but often.

And a lot of taxes for the ones who throw them away where they want. 
>> And impose a lot of taxes on those who throw them away wherever they want.

So because of the law, people will start recycling all the plastic bags. 
>> CORRECT!

Then, after years, people will get use to it so the animals won't die, and there will be less trash.
>> Then, after years, people will get used to it, so the animals won't die, and there will be less trash.
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