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About long average working hour

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I disagree about working for long hours. Actually, In this country, people used to work on saturday until noon. However, in 2003, the government announced that the saturday would be full holiday. Even though, economists were predicted that policy would cause economic crisis. Nowadays It is revealed the prediction is wrong. Also I heard reporting on research about effectiveness of work. In short, the group who works 4 days a week work more effective than the other group who works 5 days a week.
In conclusion, working for long hours doesn't relate with effectiveness.

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Hi there Se Hun~!^^ It's great to know that you're always enthusiastic when completing your writings! Continue to have  a well-developed vocabulary.
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I disagree about working for long hours. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Actually, In this country, people used to work on saturday until noon. 
>>> Actually, in this country, some people work on Saturdays until noontime.
However, in 2003, the government announced that the saturday would be full holiday. 
>>> However, in 2003, the government announced that Saturday would a rest day.
Even though, economists were predicted that policy would cause economic crisis.
>>> Even though, economists predicted that the policy would cause economic crisis.
Nowadays It is revealed the prediction is wrong.
>>> Nowadays, it is revealed that the prediction is wrong.
Also I heard reporting on research about effectiveness of work.
>>> Also, I heard some report on research about the effectiveness of work.
In short, the group who works 4 days a week work more effective than the other group who works 5 days a week.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
In conclusion, working for long hours doesn't relate with effectiveness.
>>> In conclusion, working for long hours doesn't have something to do with efficiency.
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