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Write about a place you would like to visit and what you would do there.

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I want to visit Uzbekistan. I want to see its exotic architectures and scenery. I want to stroll around the street and enjoy the exotic atmosphere. Also, I want to visit some places like Amir Temur Mausoleum, which is a tomb of Temur. I want to see it's round roof, blue tiles and geometric patterns in person. And then I will go to Shah-i-Zinda. It is a beautiple Muslim temple. Also, I want to visit local market and eat some food.

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Hi Seong Eun,

I wanted to commend you for your diligent work on your homework. Your writing about wanting to visit Uzbekistan is vivid and engaging. Your descriptions of the exotic architectures, scenery, and the atmosphere really paint a picture of what it would be like to be there. It's clear that you put thought and effort into imagining your trip and expressing your excitement to explore the Amir Temur Mausoleum and Shah-i-Zinda. Keep up the great work!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I want to visit Uzbekistan. I want to see its exotic architectures and scenery.

>>I want to visit Uzbekistan. I want to see its exotic architecture and scenery.

I want to stroll around the street and enjoy the exotic atmosphere.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I want to wander through the streets and savor the unique atmosphere.

Also, I want to visit some places like Amir Temur Mausoleum, which is a tomb of Temur.

>>Also, I want to visit some places like the Amir Temur Mausoleum, which is the tomb of Temur.

I want to see it's round roof, blue tiles and geometric patterns in person.

>>I want to see its round roof, blue tiles and geometric patterns in person.

And then I will go to Shah-i-Zinda. It is a beautiple Muslim temple.

>>And then I will go to Shah-i-Zinda. It is a beautiful Muslim temple.

Also, I want to visit local market and eat some food.

>>Also, I want to visit the local market and eat some food.

 

 

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