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Actually I have lived far away my two sons for long time.
They are studying abroad. So, they visit here on vacation.
But, during the semester, we communicate by using voice and messenger of Kakao 2 or 3 times a week.
Sometimes, we chat group video call.

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Hi Young Soon!
Always be careful about the terms that you choose to use. 
Look at the corrections so that you will have a basis.
Keep practicing!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Actually I have lived far away my two sons for long time.
>> Actually, I have lived far away from my two sons for long time.
They are studying abroad. So, they visit here on vacation.
>> They are studying abroad so they can only visit on vacations.
But, during the semester, we communicate by using voice and messenger of Kakao 2 or 3 times a week.
>> However, during the semester. we communicate by using audio calls and the messenger service of Kakao 2 or 3 times a week.
Sometimes, we chat group video call.
>> We also have group video calls sometimes. 
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