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What do you think is the best martial art? Why?

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I think the best martial art is Korean traditional Taekwondo.
I think I am proud of Taekwondo, Because is very cool.

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                           What do you think is the best martial art? Why?

I think the best martial art is Korean traditional Taekwondo.
>> CORRECT~~

I think I am proud of Taekwondo, Because is very cool.
>> I think I am proud of Taekwondo because it is a very cool sport. 

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