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Hello. T. sharon! This is my homework.

My favorite school memory is P.E competition.
Each class competes P.E other classes.
Last year, my class didn't win first prize. But it was memorable moment.
So I think my favorite school memory is P.E competition!

Good night!

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Hi Irene!
It's good to see you consistently writing.
I really like your stories and ideas.
Take note of the grammar corrections.
You can easily follow sentence patterns very soon.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
My favorite school memory is P.E competition.
>> My favorite school memory is a P.E. competition.
Each class competes P.E other classes.
>> Each class competes with other P.E. classes.
Last year, my class didn't win first prize. 
>> Correct
But it was memorable moment.
>> However, it was still a memorable moment.
So I think my favorite school memory is P.E competition!
>> So I think my favorite school memory is that P.E competition!
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