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The best thing that has happened to me recently is that my first daughter got a job. The company she will work for is a distributor specializing in health & beauty & baby online. She will work as a web designer. She majored in tourism English. Her job has nothing to do with her major. However, after graduating from college, she went to a design academy and prepared for employment. She said that she wanted to travel with her younger sister before going to work. So, she and her sister will travel to Gangneung Beach and arrive home this evening. She will go to work for the first time on April 29th and I look forward to her having a good experience and career in her new company.

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Congratulations to your eldest daughter, Mia!  I believe that she will enjoy her first working experience. You did a great job writing your homework! Thank you for sharing. 
-Khai
The best thing that has happened to me recently is that my first daughter got a job. 

>> CORRECT

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>> My eldest daughter got a job and it¡¯s the best thing that happened to me recently.

The company she will work for is a distributor specializing in health & beauty & baby online. 

>> The company she will work for is an online distributor specializing in health, beauty, and babies. 

She will work as a web designer. 

>> CORRECT

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>> She was hired as a web designer.

She majored in tourism English. 

>> CORRECT

OR

>> Her major was tourism English.

Her job has nothing to do with her major. 

>> CORRECT

OR

>> The job that she got was not related to her major.

However, after graduating from college, she went to a design academy and prepared for employment. 

>> CORRECT

She said that she wanted to travel with her younger sister before going to work.

>> CORRECT

OR

>> My daughter said she wanted to travel with her younger sister before she started working.

 So, she and her sister will travel to Gangneung Beach and arrive home this evening. 

>> CORRECT

OR

>> My daughters will go to Gangneung Beach and they will be coming back home this evening.

She will go to work for the first time on April 29th and I look forward to her having a good experience and career in her new company.

>> CORRECT

OR

>> Her first day at work will be on April 29th and I look forward to her having a good experience and a new career in her new company.


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