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What do you think of Korean idol boy groups?

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I don't know about idol boy groups but I think idol boy groups are very fast and cool.
When I see their performance, I feel they practiced a lot.
They are handsome, good at singing and dacing.

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                            What do you think of Korean idol boy groups?



I don't know about idol boy groups but I think idol boy groups are very fast and cool.
>> OR: I don't know much about Korean idol boy groups but I think they have high-energy dance styles and songs, and look very trendy. 

When I see their performance, I feel they practiced a lot.
>> OR: When I watch their performances, I can guess they practiced a lot. 

They are handsome, good at singing and dancing.
>> They are handsome and good at singing and dancing.

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