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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of urban gardening?

I'm positively think about "Urban gardening".
The urban gardening has many advantage things.
Typically, the biggest pros is that we can grow plants or vegetables, we don't need go to country side.
Next, we can grow and eat our fresh vegetables and fruits.
But we already know well, grow to plants is not easy.
First of all we need to invest time and money for our own plants.
And we need to consider the weather in the city.
It's because unfortunately, urban's air condition is not good in South Korea.
So, it will be might to sad results compared to investments.
In addition, the biggest troublesome is farm thief.
They are secretly take other people's plants and destroy a farm.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of urban gardening?


I'm positively think about "Urban gardening".
>> I have positive thoughts about "Urban gardening".
The urban gardening has many advantage things.
>> Urban gardening has many advantages.
Typically, the biggest pros is that we can grow plants or vegetables, we don't need to go to country side.
>> CORRECT!
Next, we can grow and eat our fresh vegetables and fruits.
>> CORRECT!
But we already know well, grow to plants is not easy.
>> But we already know it well, growing plants is not easy.
First of all we need to invest time and money for our own plants.
>> CORRECT!
And we need to consider the weather in the city.
>> CORRECT!
It's because unfortunately, urban's air condition is not good in South Korea.
>> CORRECT!
So, it will be might to sad results compared to investments.
>> So, it may give bad results compared to investments.
In addition, the biggest troublesome is farm thief.
>> In addition, the biggest problems are farm thieves.
They are secretly take other people's plants and destroy a farm.
>> They secretly take other people's plants and destroy the farm.

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