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What do you think is the most popular toy for children nowadays?

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I think the most popular toy is Nintendo or idol card and board games
Some boys like Nintendo game pack, some girls like idol card.
And board games are popular with all children.

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I think the most popular toy is Nintendo or idol card and board games
>> OR: I would say that Nintendo or idol cards, and board games are the most popular toys these days. 

Some boys like Nintendo game pack, some girls like idol card.
>> Some boys like Nintendo game packs while some girls prefer idol cards.

And board games are popular with all children.
>> CORRECT~~

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