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My town, Sadang Dong is not risky to live in. Because of cctvs, we can hardly experience any crimes. Even though many people live in my town thanks to the convenient transportation, it is safer than other towns of Seoul.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
It's nice to know that you are currently living in a safe neighborhood. I think it's very important to feel secure and safe in the place where we live.
- T. Caitlyn
My town, Sadang Dong is not risky to live in. 
>> CORRECT
Because of cctvs, we can hardly experience any crimes. 
>> Because of the CCTV cameras, we hardly experience any crimes. 
Even though many people live in my town thanks to the convenient transportation, it is safer than other towns of Seoul.
>> Even though many people live in my town due to the convenient transportation, it is safer than other parts of Seoul.
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