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What is a perfect weather like for you?

Perfect weather is not change of weather at these day. This mean is weather of present similer weather of past. But, every weather is changing thesedays.
The weather is very serious about it thesedays.
The Reasons are various and many changes.
We have many problem about climate change.
Andthen, we have to try about this problem.
It is homework for us and our descendants.

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Thank you for this Sir Ko!

Perfect weather is not change of weather at these day. 
>>>  A perfect weather is not the change of weather these days. 
This mean is weather of present similer weather of past. 
>>> This means, the weather in this present time is similar with the weather in the past.   
But, every weather is changing these days.
>>>  correct 
The weather is very serious about it thesedays.
>>>   The weather is extreme these days.
The r
easons are various and many changes.
>>>   The reasons are various and due to many changes.
We have many problem about climate change.
>>>   We have many problems about climate change.
And then, we have to try about this problem.
>>> Moreover, we have to try to do something about this problem.
It is a homework for us and our descendants.
>>>  correct 
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