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No, I am not afraid of going on scary park rides but if it's very scary so my brother is scared I am afraid.
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I'm glad you took the time to express yourself today.
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You did well in giving the correct words and expressions.
Really good job.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
No, I am not afraid of going on scary park rides but if it's very scary so my brother is scared I am afraid.
>> No, I am not afraid of going on scary park rides but if they are very scary, my brother gets scared and then I also feel afraid.
No, I haven't seen anybody who hurt themselevs in an amusement park
>> No, I haven't seen anybody who hurt themselves in an amusement park.
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