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What was the nicest place you saw abroad? Explain.

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I think the nicest place is night market in Vietnam danang because it is very amazing.
First, I can buy iron plate chocolate ice cream, it is very sweet and delicious.
Second, wish boat was the coolest.

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Good Tuesday evening, Jimmy!

I'm sending you back your edited composition from Monday's assignment. Please don't forget to check the corrections, such as "Da Nang, Vietnam" not "Vietnam Da Nang." Good night and see you this Wednesday! 

Cheers,
Jean~~



                 

                 What was the nicest place you saw abroad? Explain.


I think the nicest place is night market in Vietnam danang because it is very amazing.
>> I think the nicest place is the night market in Da Nang, Vietnam because it is very amazing.

First, I can buy iron plate chocolate ice cream, it is very sweet and delicious.
>> First, I can buy iron plate chocolate ice cream, which is very sweet and delicious.

Second, wish boat was the coolest.
>> Second, the wish boat was the coolest.

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