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Which country do you think is the best in the world.

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I think the best country is Vietnam in the world.
First, Vietnam is very near from my country.
Second, Vietnamese very friendly.
Third, Vietnam place is very famous.

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                                            Which country do you think is the best in the world?


I think the best country is Vietnam in the world.
>> I think the best country in the world is Vietnam.

First, Vietnam is very near from my country.
>> First, Vietnam is very near my country.

Second, Vietnamese very friendly.
>> Second, Vietnamese are very friendly.

Third, Vietnam place is very famous.
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