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what role does the audience play in making a music concert enjoyable ? how do they contribute to the

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회원님의 영작문

I believe that the audience plays a crucial role in making music concerts enjoyable and contributes significantly to the atmosphere.
Their active participation will enable the performers to perform with more energy and passion.
I also remember feeling even more excited when I sang at a Korean karaoke bar and the people responded enthusiastically.
Recently, fans of certain singers or bands have formed large support groups to systematically support their favorite singers.
They go to singers' concert venues all over the country and support them.
They also wear clothes with singers on them as a group and sing along when the singer sings.
Some parents in Korea worry that their children are too absorbed in their favorite singers and performances rather than their studies.
However, I believe that the enthusiastic participation of young audiences not only boosts the morale of performers, but also plays a positive role in relieving young people's academic stress.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Monday, Sun! 

At any live performance, the audience plays a crucial role in what happens on stage. When performers play or sing for an appreciative, well-behaved audience, they perform at their best. Musicians should be the best audience members.

- Kristine ^^

I believe that the audience plays a crucial role in making music concerts enjoyable and contributes significantly to the atmosphere.
>> Correct. 
Their active participation will enable the performers to perform with more energy and passion.
>> Correct.
Or >> Their active participation will enable the artist to perform with more energy and passion.
I also remember feeling even more excited when I sang at a Korean karaoke bar and the people responded enthusiastically.
>> I also recall being even more thrilled when I performed at a Korean karaoke club and got an enthusiastic response from people.
Recently, fans of certain singers or bands have formed large support groups to systematically support their favorite singers.
>> Large support groups have recently been established by fans of particular musicians or singers in order to actively boost their preferred vocalists.
They go to singers' concert venues all over the country and support them.
>> They support singers by attending their concerts across the nation.
They also wear clothes with singers on them as a group and sing along when the singer sings.
>> Correct.
Some parents in Korea worry that their children are too absorbed in their favorite singers and performances rather than their studies.
>> In Korea, some parents are concerned that their children are spending too much time studying and not enough time enjoying their favorite singers and performances.
However, I believe that the enthusiastic participation of young audiences not only boosts the morale of performers, but also plays a positive role in relieving young people's academic stress.
>> On the other hand, I believe that young audience' passionate engagement helps relieve the scholastic stress of young people while also boosting the morale of artists.
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