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HOMEWORK: How do you think hope influences your daily life and decisions? Discuss in 3 to 5 sentences.

It is widely accepted that a hope means a positive imagination for the future.
we often confront issues that seem impossible or are really hard to solve.
In that cases, we hesitate to do it or even don't try.
But if we can just imagine the happy result our hesitant tasks turn to much easier.
So I think a hope help us make decisions in daily life.

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Hey, Min Ju. Your writing is clear, and your sentences are well-structured. You have a good command of basic grammar and punctuation. Continue to practice writing essays or journal entries to enhance your skills. Keep up the great work! Consistency is key in language learning. Have a good one! ~Jane c",) 


It is widely accepted that a hope means a positive imagination for the future. 
>> It is widely accepted that hope means a positive imagination for the future. 

we often confront issues that seem impossible or are really hard to solve.
>> We often confront issues that seem impossible or hard to solve. 

In that cases, we hesitate to do it or even don't try.
>> In that case, we hesitate to do it or even don't try. 

But if we can just imagine the happy result our hesitant tasks turn to much easier.
>> CORRECT 
OR>> But if we can just imagine a positive result the tasks we hesitated to do become much easier. 

So I think a hope help us make decisions in daily life.
>> So I think hope helps us make decisions in daily life.
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