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No need for charity?

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I don't think that one day there will be no need for charity in any society. To make it possible, we need highly advanced and well-organized welfare systems. As long as our society has capitalism and people are seeking for more money, there will be natural gaps between the rich and the poor. And as far as there is a gap, we need for charity.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
I couldn't agree with you more. It's ideal, but it's very hard to imagine a society without charities or those in need of help.
- T. Caitlyn
I don't think that one day there will be no need for charity in any society. 
>>CORRECT
To make it possible, we need highly advanced and well-organized welfare systems. 
>>CORRECT
As long as our society has capitalism and people are seeking for more money, there will be natural gaps between the rich and the poor. 
>>CORRECT
And as far as there is a gap, we need for charity.
>> And as long as there is a gap, we will need charity.
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