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What are the best ways to avoid getting sick?

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The best ways to avoid getting sick is boosting your immune system. There are so many reasons for getting sick. We can't remove all the reasons. We have to live with various causes. It means that when bad viruses get into our bodies, if our immune system kills the viruses notting happens. There are ways to boost our immune system. First, do excrise. Second, reduce taking antibiotics. Our immune system naturally weakens, when we get older. So, we have to try for boosting it.

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Excellent work, Hwanny! Thank you for being diligent with you home work. Keep going!
- Teacher Angela

The best ways to avoid getting sick is boosting your immune system. 
>> CORRECT

There are so many reasons for getting sick. We can't remove all the reasons. 
>> There are many reasons for getting sick. We can't eliminate all of them.

We have to live with various causes. 
>> We have to live with various causes of illness.

It means that when bad viruses get into our bodies, if our immune system kills the viruses notting happens. 
>> It means that when bad viruses enter our bodies, if our immune system kills the viruses, nothing happens

There are ways to boost our immune system. First, do excrise. Second, reduce taking antibiotics. 
>> There are ways to boost our immune system. First, exercise regularly. Second, reduce the intake of antibiotics.

Our immune system naturally weakens, when we get older. 
>> Our immune system naturally weakens as we get older.

So, we have to try for boosting it
>> So, we have to try to boost it.
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