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Seoul has a lot of buildings and the building is very high.
Seoul is developed and crowded.
Seoul is harmonized traditional things and modern things.
I like Seoul because it is the capital city of Korea.

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Hello, Yale!

Here's your revised homework. Many thanks for sending it. Please take a look at the few revisions like adding comma, and alternative expressions provided, such as "highly developed" which is another word for "developed" and "congested" which is another word for "crowded". Have a good one!  


Cheers,
Jean~~




                       Write three good things about Seoul.


Seoul has a lot of buildings and the building is very high.
>> Seoul has a lot of buildings and the buildings are very high.

Seoul is developed and crowded.
>> OR: Seoul is highly developed and congested. 

Seoul is harmonized traditional things and modern things.
>> Seoul harmonizes traditional and modern things.

I like Seoul because it is the capital city of Korea.
>> CORRECT~~

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