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Is learning something new a waste of time?

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I think,learning something new is valuable in life.
If people enjoy learning new things,they are trying to improve their life.
Their brain will not be older than other people.
Learning whatever they do, seems to give people energy.

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Hi Young Soon!
I always thank you for your efforts.
Your compositions can be elevated to their best versions.
I know you can work on it.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I think,learning something new is valuable in life.
>> I think learning something new is valuable in life.
If people enjoy learning new things,they are trying to improve their life.
>> If people enjoy learning new things, they would be able to improve their life.
Their brain will not be older than other people.
>> Their brain will remain active and therefore, they will stay sharp. 
Learning whatever they do, seems to give people energy.
>> Learning in whatever they do seems to give people energy.

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