¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What¡¯s your favorite food?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÀÌ*Èñ
2024-07-17 1856

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I don't have favorite food, don't have hate food. But l like good food. I enjoy food time. I think lt's not what you eat, lt's who you eat with. I like to eat good food with good people. Enjoy your food time, you will become healthy.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Eva,

 

Good job on your homework! Thanks for sharing your thoughts about food! You did very well. Here¡¯s a simple guide to help you improve your essay:

Introduction: Start by saying what your essay will be about. For example: "To me, the best part of eating isn¡¯t just the food, but who you eat it with."

Body: Write a few sentences about your ideas. You could say: "I don¡¯t have a favorite food or one I dislike. I enjoy many different kinds of food. What matters most to me is eating with good people. It makes the meal more fun."

Conclusion: Finish by summarizing your main points and adding a final thought. For example: "So, while I don¡¯t have a favorite food, I believe that sharing a meal with great people makes it special."

 

So your essay might look like this:

 

To me, the best part of eating isn¡¯t just the food, but who you eat it with. I don¡¯t have a favorite food or one I dislike. I enjoy many different kinds of food. What matters most to me is eating with good people. It makes the meal more fun. So, while I don¡¯t have a favorite food, I believe that sharing a meal with great people makes it special.

 

You¡¯re doing a great job. I look forward to reading more of your work!

 

~Teacher Cathy

 

I don't have favorite food, don't have hate food.

>>I don't have a favorite food, and I don't have any foods I hate.

But l like good food.

>>CORRECT

OR>>But I do enjoy good food.

I enjoy food time.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I enjoy food time.

I think lt's not what you eat, lt's who you eat with.

>>I think it's not about what you eat, but who you eat with.

I like to eat good food with good people.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I enjoy sharing good food with good people.

Enjoy your food time, you will become healthy.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Enjoy your meals; it will help you stay healthy.

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
140548 What appliance do you wish you had in your home that you don¡¯t... ÀÓ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2024-10-22 1878
140547 Home work ½Å*¶ó ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1483
140546 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 2
140545 The last time I was proud ÃÖ*Âù ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1545
140544 Homework ¿À*º½ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1
140543 How can we show everyone is equal? ½Å*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1522
140542 21oct2024- homework ±è*¶ó ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1821
140541 What were some of the rules you had to follow at your high... ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 5
140540 I don\'t want to see things on social media that you don\'t like. À±*Çý ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1794
140539 I don\'t make much effort. À±*Çý ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1502
140538 What strategies do you use to build your self-confidence? ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1523
140537 How would the world change if you could instantly understand any... ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1477
140536 What would change if money didn¡¯t exist but people still had to... ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1591
140535 Can you think of a time when doing nothing was the best action? ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1951
140534 Should kids have more of a say in decisions made by their... ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1632
140533 What do you do to maintain or improve your mental health? ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 2149
140532 Homework ³ë*ö ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1939
140531 Why do you think many people smoke? Àå*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1793
140530 Too many students earning degrees have diluted the value of a... ¾È*À± ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1905
140529 What do you enjoy most about autumn? ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-10-21 1544

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04