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Is better education the solution to increasing crime rate or more serious punishment? - simi

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I want to make a limit line. When someone crime, society can give them two times. At that time, they can have a educate. (But heavy criminal or kill will not have a chance.)
Ordinary people can make miss. we can give them two times. Not more than three times. Under two times, punishment will be light. However, if they over the line, educating for them is not necessary. they need hurricane punishment.

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Hello, Mr. Sammy! Personally, I think these could all be applicable to countries with a good judicial system. Also, I'm curious about the 'hurricane punishment'. Hope you could t ell me further about it. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
-T. Sonny
I want to make a limit line. 
>>I want to set a limitation.
When someone crime, society can give them two times. 
>>When someone commits a crime, the court would give them two chances.
At that time, they can have a educate. 
>>For that period, they would be educated.
(But heavy criminal or kill will not have a chance.)
>>(But for severe crimes or murder will not have a chance.)
Ordinary people can make miss. 
>>Ordinary people could fail.
we can give them two times. 
>>They would be given two chances.
Not more than three times. 
>>Not more than thrice.
Under two times, punishment will be light. 
>>If done less than twice, the punishment would be light.
However, if they over the line, educating for them is not necessary. 
>>However, if they exceed the limitation, education would not be necessary for them.
they need hurricane punishment.
>>What they need is a punishment as severe as a hurricane.
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