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What mysteries or unanswered questions about the Great Pyramid of Giza intrigue you the most?

작성자: 박*호
2024-07-25 1855

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The Great Pyramid of Giza has long stimulated the curiosity of tourists and archaeologists.
There was a theory that the purpose of the Great Pyramid was initially a foundation for worshiping gods, but it has now been revealed to be a tomb for the Pharaoh.
And it was revealed to some extent that the people who participated in the construction were not slaves but professional architects.
However, I am still in awe of the fact that such a huge building was built so long ago, about 2,600 BC or 4,600 years ago.
The Great Pyramid of Giza is 146m high and is said to have been built with 2.3 million rocks weighing several tons.
It is known that the construction period was as long as 27 years.
It is also known that the Great Pyramid precisely matches the cardinal directions and constellation patterns.
nevertheless, my heart aches and becomes sad when I think of the people who suffered and died in the process of building such an enormous monument for the dead Pharaoh 4,600 years ago.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good morning, Sun! 

The Great Pyramid of Giza, built around 4,500 years ago, continues to puzzle researchers with its precise construction, purpose, and symbolic significance. Questions persist about whether it served solely as a tomb or had additional functions, such as astronomical observation. The mystery makes the Great Pyramid a timeless enigma, inspiring ongoing exploration and debate in the field of archaeology. 

- Kristine ^^ 

The Great Pyramid of Giza has long stimulated the curiosity of tourists and archaeologists.
>> Correct.
There was a theory that the purpose of the Great Pyramid was initially a foundation for worshiping gods, but it has now been revealed to be a tomb for the Pharaoh.
>> Correct.
And it was revealed to some extent that the people who participated in the construction were not slaves but professional architects.
>> It was also partially disclosed that the people involved in the construction weren't slaves but rather professional architects.
However, I am still in awe of the fact that such a huge building was built so long ago, about 2,600 BC or 4,600 years ago.
>> Nonetheless, I find it astounding that such a massive structure was constructed 4,600 years ago, or roughly 2,600 BC.
The Great Pyramid of Giza is 146m high and is said to have been built with 2.3 million rocks weighing several tons.
>> The Great Pyramid of Giza is 146 meters high and it is said to have been built with 2.3 million rocks weighing several tons.
It is known that the construction period was as long as 27 years.
>> It is known that the construction period lasted as long as 27 years.
It is also known that the Great Pyramid precisely matches the cardinal directions and constellation patterns.
>> Correct.
nevertheless, my heart aches and becomes sad when I think of the people who suffered and died in the process of building such an enormous monument for the dead Pharaoh 4,600 years ago.
>> Nevertheless, when I consider the people who endured suffering and lost their lives to construct such a massive monument in honor of the deceased Pharaoh 4,600 years ago, my heart hurts and gets sorrowful.
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