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My favorite music genre

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I'm crazy in Rock'n Roll music!
I'm used to listen rock music since middle school student.
At that time I had a dream that I would visit rock music festivals in Korea.

Nowadays I enjoy rock music festivals as much as possible because the COVID-19 pandemic almost ends.
I already booked tickets of rock music festivals on August and October!
I really expect to enjoy those festivals.

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Hello, Min! 

You have mentioned that you love music before but knowing that you love rock and roll is very interesting. I think we could agree that rock and roll music is the best. ^^

You started at a young age in appreciating this music. I wonder how many concerts you have watched. It is good to look forward to more rocking moments as you have already grabbed your tickets for the coming months.

Below, you can see some of the underlined words or phrases that need revision. Please read and analyze them.  Well done!

See you again tomorrow.

-T. Donna~

I'm crazy in Rock'n Roll music!
>> Correct!
Or; I'm crazy for rock and roll music.

I'm used to listen rock music since middle school student.
>> I'm used to listening to rock music since I was a middle school student.

At that time I had a dream that I would visit rock music festivals in Korea.
>> At that time I had a dream that I would visit a rock music festivals in Korea.

Nowadays I enjoy rock music festivals as much as possible because the COVID-19 pandemic almost ends.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

I already booked tickets of rock music festivals on August and October!
>> Correct!

I really expect to enjoy those festivals.
>> Correct!
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