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Why do people spend money on travel?

>>> Travel is special. Leaving from ordinary circumstance makes me excited. To be more special and happier, it will be needed more money. money generates more funny things and interesting things. But unless I have much money enough to convert your ordinary circumstance, I want to save and earn money. So I can't use much money ordinarily. I think, if many people have enough money to do everything in life, they will not spend money on travel.

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Hello, Jun!~
In my situation, if I had a lot of money, I would travel extensively. I prefer to travel across the world without thinking about expenses. But since I have a tight budget, I would rather save it hehe.
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Travel is special. Leaving from ordinary circumstance makes me excited. 
>> Travel is special. Leaving ordinary circumstances makes me excited. 
To be more special and happier, it will be needed more money. 
or
>> It needs a lot of money to feel special and happier
Money generates more funny things and interesting things.
>>Correct
 But unless I have much money enough to convert your ordinary circumstance, I want to save and earn money. 
>>  But unless I have enough money to convert your ordinary circumstances, I want to save and earn money. 
OR
>>However, unless I have enough money to change my normal conditions, I wish to save and earn money.
So I can't use much money ordinarily. I think, if many people have enough money to do everything in life, they will not spend money on travel.
Or
>>So I can't usually spend much money. I believe that if many people have enough money to do everything in life, they will avoid spending money on vacations.

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