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Q: What gift is considered more valuable than the others? Why?
A: I think it's hard to say it's a gift, but money would be the most valuable thing when received.
Every products that people need can be bought by money, so receiving money means they can buy on their own.
But except money, I think it just depends on a person's preference because everybody likes different things.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some corrections:

1. I think it's hard to say it's a gift, but money would be the most valuable thing when received.
>>I think it's hard to say that it's a gift, but money would be the most valuable thing when received.

2. Every products that people need can be bought by money, so receiving money means they can buy on their own.
>>Every product that people need can be bought by money, so receiving money means they can buy things on their own.

3. But except money, I think it just depends on a person's preference because everybody likes different things.
>>Except money, I think it just depends on a person's preference because everybody likes different things.

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