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To love is combination from a lot of emotion.
We need to be patient and need our sacrifices.
When I was falling in love l was happy.
Everything in the world seemed to be beautiful.
But sometimes I felt sad because I want to get his affection as much as I love him.
I think I was selfish.
I used to ask myself when I was sad .
Did I love him better than I loved my self?
That is my conclusion.

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Cheer up, Ms. Sunny!
Did you know that the people we love so much usually hurt us even if it is not their intention?
It is within ourselves. we expect them to love us the way we love them and there is nothing wrong with that. However, when the source of your sadness is from within, I guess we also need to reflect on whether we are pushing ourselves too much by having great expectations from people around us. Remember, the more you understand someone, the less your heartache is.
Aki~

To love is combination from a lot of emotion.
>>> To love is a combination of a lot of emotions.

We need to be patient and need our sacrifices.
>>> We need to be patient and make our sacrifices.

When I was falling in love l was happy.
>>> When I fell in love, I was happy.

Everything in the world seemed to be beautiful.
>>> CORRECT!

But sometimes I felt sad because I want to get his affection as much as I love him.
>>> But sometimes I felt sad because I wanted to get his affection as much as I loved him.

I think I was selfish.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>>I think that is being selfish.

I used to ask myself when I was sad .
>>> I used to ask myself when I was sad.

Did I love him better than I loved my self?
>>> Did I love him better than I loved my self?

That is my conclusion.
>>> CORRECT!
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