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About my dream house

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When I get older, I want live in big house. It is looks like Ironman's house. And in house, there are many rooms. And this is very important, there are one specail room, and it use for playing drum and guitar. And outside, there are basketball coat. And I can play basketball with my friends and family. It will be so amazing. But I like small house too. And I want to make restarant, and I will sales food. It will be funny.

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Hello, John! I think, you've got so much fun imagining your dream house. I would also want a big house but also a big yard. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
When I get older, I want live in big house. 
>>When I get older, I want to live in a big house. 
It is looks like Ironman's house. 
>>It would be similar to Ironman's house.
And in house, there are many rooms. 
>>Inside it, there will be many rooms.
And this is very important, there are one specail room, and it use for playing drum and guitar. 
>>Most importantly, there is a special room which we can use to play the drum and guitar.
And outside, there are basketball coat. 
>>Outside, there will be a basketball court.
And I can play basketball with my friends and family. 
>>Correct!
It will be so amazing. 
>>Correct!
But I like small house too.
>>But I like small houses, too.
And I want to make restarant, and I will sales food. 
>>I also want to make a restaurant and sell food.
It will be funny.
>>It will be fun!
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