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The MP3 players is the best device even with its single function

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I think that the MP3 players is the best device even with its single function.
The MP3 players was so light that people can possess easily.
And the functions of MP3 players were so simple; just listening to music and reading lyrics!

Although people listen to music by smartphone nowadays, I sometimes miss the sensibility of listening on MP3 players.

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Good evening once again, Min!

I agree. The MP3, the improved version of our Walkman when we were young was one of the best single-function gadget we had in the past. It is not only handy but very personal in our own music preference. 

We can bring it anytime, anywhere and play the songs of our youth. It is one of the best! Nowadays, the some have been digitalized and we just shuffle and play according to our music taste. Of course, this is possible with the use of our smartphones.

You did a wonderful job here on your four sentences! It was almost perfect. Excellent job!

-T. Donna~

I think that the MP3 players is the best device even with its single function.
>> Correct!

The MP3 players was so light that people can possess easily.
>> The MP3 players was so light that people can possess them easily.

And the functions of MP3 players were so simple; just listening to music and reading lyrics!
>> Correct!

Although people listen to music by smartphone nowadays, I sometimes miss the sensibility of listening on MP3 players.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
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