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In South Korea, the official retirement age for pensions is moving toward 65, but many people often retire around 60 from their jobs and they continue working in other jobs like part time worker or contract worker.

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Hello, Seo Yeon!^^
I hope there are no age restrictions on employment so that people can choose to work as long as they are still able to. ^^ What do you think?~^^
Chammy 
In South Korea, the official retirement age for pensions is moving toward 65, but many people often retire around 60 from their jobs and they continue working in other jobs like part time worker or contract worker.
>> The official pension retirement age in South Korea is nearing 65, although many people in the country quit their jobs at 60 and take up part-time or contract positions instead.
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