¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

The positive side of \"Is a college education worth it?\"

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ¼Õ*Èñ
2024-09-03 1925

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hello, I'm Hana, and I'd like to present my opinion on the topic, "Is a college education worth it?" I think the college education is worth it. First, we can deeply learn various kinds of studies by taking college education. For example, the history of learning at school consists of a one-dimensional concept. However, when we study private history in college, we conduct inquiry activities such as various interpretations based on historical records. Second, The present age requires someone who has studied at university. For example, Korean conglomerates, such as Samsung and LG, tend to mostly hire people who have completed university courses. For this reason, Korean students study hard for entrance exams with the goal of entering university.
The need for college study varies from person to person. Some Korean students are the first to get a job rather than enter university. However, college education is necessary because it includes essential elements and knowledge before getting a job.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë


Hana, thank you for the great talk about this in the class. See you!
-Teacher Anji

Hello, I'm Hana, and I'd like to present my opinion on the topic, "Is a college education worth it?"
>> CORRECT
I think the college education is worth it. 
>>I think a college education is worth it.
First, we can deeply learn various kinds of studies by taking college education.
>>First, we can deeply learn various kinds of studies by pursuing a college education.
For example, the history of learning at school consists of a one-dimensional concept. 
>>For example, the history taught at school consists of a one-dimensional concept.
However, when we study private history in college, we conduct inquiry activities such as various interpretations based on historical records. 
>>However, when we study history in college, we engage in inquiry activities such as exploring various interpretations based on historical records.
Second, the present age requires someone who has studied at university.
>> CORRECT
 For example, Korean conglomerates, such as Samsung and LG, tend to mostly hire people who have completed university courses.
>> CORECT
 For this reason, Korean students study hard for entrance exams with the goal of entering university.
>> CORRECT
The need for college study varies from person to person. 
>> The need for a college education varies from person to person.
Some Korean students are the first to get a job rather than enter university. 
>> Some Korean students prefer to get a job first rather than attend university.
However, college education is necessary because it includes essential elements and knowledge before getting a job.
>> However, a college education is necessary because it includes essential elements and knowledge needed before getting a job.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
140247 What would a perfect weekend be like for you? IS you could have... Â÷*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-06 2
140246 Do you enjoy meeting new people? Why or why not? Â÷*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-06 2
140245 homework ±è*¶ó ¿Ï·á 2024-10-06 2161
140244 What was the most memorable weekend you had with your friends? ¼­*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-10-06 2167
140243 Homework ¿À*Çö ¿Ï·á 2024-10-05 2
140242 Imagine you have won ten million dollars. Who will you tell?... ¿À*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2024-10-05 1505
140241 What qualities of a person do most people admire? ÃÖ*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-05 2
140240 How would the world look if everyone had the same talents? ±è*¼ø ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2290
140239 Proper Compulsiveness makes it better ÀÓ*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2159
140238 English grammar is difficult to me! ¼­*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 1
140237 Being physically attractive ¹Ú*°æ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2240
140236 How do you balance hard work with other aspects of your life,... ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 1
140235 What do you think about adopting pets from shelters? ±è*¸° ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2708
140234 Ȳ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2218
140233 Should more people use public transport instead of cars or... ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2149
140232 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2297
140231 What kind of people are less likely to suffer from stress or... ÃÖ*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 4
140230 I agree with that idea Àü*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2398
140229 What do you do when you are exhausted? Àå*±¸ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2218
140228 Sleep ¾ç*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2024-10-04 2266

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04