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Should parents help their children plan their future?

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No. I think it's not good for children. Children have to imagine their life in their own mind. If their parents help them, then it could be fix their other possibilities. And they think they are helping children, but children can think it's suppression. Maybe they feel lethargic and unfair. I think the best way is when children spontaneously ask their parents to help, then they can say a little tips or related story. And make sure to be independent theirselve.

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Hey there, Lin! You made a valid point about fostering children's independence.Well done!

No. I think it's not good for children. 
Correct, or
>>I believe it's not beneficial for children.
Children have to imagine their life in their own mind. 
>>Children need to imagine their lives in their own minds.
OR
>> Children need to envision their lives in their own imagination.
If their parents help them, then it could be fix their other possibilities. 
>>If their parents help them, it could limit their other possibilities.
And they think they are helping children, but children can think it's suppression. 
Correct, or
>>Although parents may intend to help, children might view it as a form of suppression.
Maybe they feel lethargic and unfair. 
>>They may feel lethargic and treated unfairly.
I think the best way is when children spontaneously ask their parents to help, then they can say a little tips or related story. 
>>I think the best way / approach is when children spontaneously ask their parents for help,  at that point, parents can offer a few tips or share a related story.
And make sure to be independent theirselve.
>>And make sure / ensure they remain independent themselves.
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