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I'll take less when I meet vurnerable and needy people. I want to be attentive. And it's going to be thoughtful. I can see so many pool people in the world. We have to take less even there are lots of things. And then we are going to be humble. But we have to preserve our own things and protect it.

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Happy mid-week, Ji Yun. Your sentences are becoming clearer! Your sentence structure is improving. I¡¯ve noticed fewer errors with subject-verb agreement and tense usage. You¡¯re making great progress! Keep up the hard work and don't hesitate to ask me if you have any questions. Have a good night and see you in our next class! ~Jane ^__^


I'll take less when I meet vurnerable and needy people. 
>> I take less when I meet vulnerable and need people. 

I want to be attentive. And it's going to be thoughtful. I can see so many pool people in the world. 
>> I want to be attentive and thoughtful to the people in the world. 

We have to take less even there are lots of things. 
>> We have to take less even though there are many things offered to us. 

And then we are going to be humble. 
>> Then we become humble. 

But we have to preserve our own things and protect it.
>> But we have to preserve the things we own and protect them.
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